This is my first Friday Fictioneers post. I hope I have done everything correctly ๐
I call it The Criminal, it is 100 words and inspired by the lovely photo byย Gah.
A full moon shone on me like a spotlight.
That pointed finger from the heavens was all that tied me to the crime.
Still I obsessively scanned the street below my bedroom window.
Still I jumped at every passing siren.
I wondered if they had found her body yet.
Tucked away so expertly from scrutinizing eyes.
If they caught me I would be thrown in jail.
But I stood there, paralyzed.
Crippled by nerves.
A free man too scared to leave that very spot beside the window.
I hoped that they’d find me soon.
So my prison sentence could end.
Welcome A.S, you did everything right. Great first post. Your story captured the paralyzing fear of a wanted man. Looking forward to reading more of your stories.
Susan
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Thanks Susan! Reading everyone’s take on this weekly prompt has got me all excited! I’ll see you around as well!
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Nice going! ๐
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers!
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Thanks man! I’m glad to be here ๐
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Looking forward to next week! ๐
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You an me both man!
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Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. I liked this story. You portrayed his guilt well
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Thank you so much Neil!
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Welcome to our fabulous group, Jacob!
Excellent first stab that I very much enjoyed.
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Thank you Dale! I am looking forward to the weeks to come
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Dear Jacob,
As far as I can see you did everything like a pro. A hearty welcome to Friday Fictioneers!
I loved the paradox in your story. He fears going to prison for his crime, yet he’s in his own private prison already. Well done, especially for a maiden voyage. ๐ I look forward to reading more from you. It’s only fair to warn you that this is a highly addictive activity, especially with our wonderful global community.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks for having me Rochelle! I can already tell Iโm going to be an addict. I love seeing the different directions everyone takes the prompt. Canโt wait for next week
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Welcome to FF! Loved the story.
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Thanks! It really means a lot
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Welcome to Friday Fictioneers! Brilliant take on the prompt.
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I appreciate the warm welcome Lisa! Thank you ๐
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Great stuff, he’s created his own open prison of guilt, like it.
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Moral of the story is that killing people is bad Mโkay haha. Iโm glad you like it man thanks for the comment!
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This was so believable! You’ve shown his dilemma very vividly. Great debut to Friday Fictioneers!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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So glad you liked it Susan ๐ I really appreciate the comment! Iโm happy to join the ranks of so many talented writers such as yourself!
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I am looking forward to reading more like this. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers
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Thank you for your support Micheal! I look forward to delivering! ๐
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Welcome to the community. Nice story.
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Thanks man! Glad to be part of this
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Welcome to the Friday Fictioneers. I’m pleased you jumped in when my picture was up and it’s great to have you. YI love the story, from the rising paranoia about being found out through the stressful worrying and finally to the hopefor the relief of punishment. It paints a whole spectrum of emotions. Warning: the Friday Fictioneers challenge is very addictive. ๐
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Haha, I’ve been warned about the addictive nature of this community. It’s one I welcome. Everyone is so nice!
Also thank you so much for your comments, I’m a fairly anxious person by nature. I’m glad I was able to communicate clear enough haha
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I read both posts. Only 100 words, yet so descriptive.
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Thank you for the complements and for the read! I’m really glad you liked them!
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I truly do like your work.
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